A great way to learn about writing is to read a lot of it, good and bad, and think about it. But oh, god, is this stuff painful.
But the commentary is lovely! Check this out:
So far in Tribulation Force, the Buck pages are outnumbering the Rayford pages by more than 2-to-1. And even when we do check in briefly with Buck's co-star here it's mainly in order to eavesdrop on Chloe's side of Buck's romantic subplot, in which Rayford plays the role of the nurse in Romeo and Juliet.